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 title: The Apollo platform
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-The Apollo GraphQL data platform brings many benefits to both new and existing projects, helps teams work more effortlessly with data from a variety of sources and allows products to evolve faster.
+The Apollo GraphQL data platform simplifies the data-layer within organizations, helps teams work more effortlessly with data from a variety of sources, and allows products to evolve faster.
 
 The more technical benefits of GraphQL adoption are well-documented in other areas of this documentation, however this “Fundamentals” section will focus on explaining pre-adoption recommendations which have been guided by Apollo’s many years of first-hand experiences working with everything from single-person apps to enterprise deployments.
 
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 ## What is Apollo?
 
-Apollo is a production-ready set of tools and libraries built upon the GraphQL specification and implements techniques and feedback from our partners, the community, and extensive research.  We have packaged this knowledge into various Apollo products and made it easy to introduce into new and existing projects of all shapes and sizes.
+Apollo is a production-ready set of tools and libraries, built upon the GraphQL specification, which implement features, techniques and feedback from our partners, the community, and our own extensive research.  We’ve incorporated this learning into a variety of Apollo products and made it easy to introduce into new and existing projects of all shapes and sizes.
 
-In addition to providing the functional means to implement a full GraphQL data layer through the use of Apollo Server and Apollo Client, Apollo also brings documentation, best practices and support backed by years of GraphQL experience.
+At its core, and backed by years of GraphQL experience, the open-source Apollo Server and Apollo Client provide the functional means to roll out a full-featured GraphQL deployment, plus the documentation, best practices and support to do it right.
 
-Apollo Engine receives metrics from Apollo Server and provides alerting, performance monitoring and schema management tools which help developers feel confident about their deployment and ensure a stable and performant GraphQL stack.
+Additional advanced features are powered by Apollo Engine which works seamlessly with Apollo Client and Apollo server to enable caching, alerting, performance monitoring and schema management tools which help developers feel confident about their deployment and ensure a stable and performant GraphQL stack.
 
 Apollo believes that a strong data management story goes far in the world of software development and feel our software and expertise plays a critical role in that story.
 
 ## Ready for production
 
 While the GraphQL specification was first made public by Facebook in 2015, GraphQL has been a key component of their mobile application deployment since 2012.
 
-At Apollo, we quickly found GraphQL to be an excellent solution to many of concerns with existing data access techniques and have since used it to power critical infrastructure.  Over the years, we’ve worked with customers and partners of all sizes and continually brought new research to the open-source Apollo offerings.  The open-source community has reciprocated that effort and we confidently use the same Apollo open-source offerings in production deployments.
+At Apollo, we found GraphQL to be an excellent solution to many of the problems we encountered with existing techniques and now use it to power critical infrastructure.  Over the years, we’ve worked with the open-source community along with customers and partners of all sizes to continually bring new innovations to the open-source Apollo offerings and we're proud that those offerings are suitable for everything from startups to large-scale deployments.
 
-In addition to our own experience, we have received extensive feedback and support from enterprise customers.  A few of our most public and notable enterprise case-studies are:
+In addition to our own experience, we have received extensive feedback, contributions and support from enterprise customers who are actively using Apollo GraphQL in production.  A few of our most public and notable case-studies are:
 
 * **The New York Times**: Learn how The New York Times switched from Relay to Apollo & implemented features in their app such as SSR and persisted queries.
 * **Express**: Easy-to-use pagination with Apollo helped improve the Express eCommerce team’s key product pages.
 * **Major League Soccer**: MLS’ switch from Redux to Apollo for state management enabled them to delete nearly all of their Redux code.
 * **Expo**: Developing their React Native app with Apollo allowed the Expo engineers to focus on improving their product instead of writing data fetching logic.
 * **KLM**: Learn how the KLM team scaled their Angular app with GraphQL and Apollo.
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